Sam

I did like this poem. :D Just some bits I caught. First stanza- Weeeoooweeooo! Cliche at two o'clock! 'Children of the sun, moon, and stars'. You need to change this ...

Hehe...:D I kind of agree with Incandescence, as it doesn't make sense at first glance. You kind of have to go through it a couple times to get it. That's ...

I have to say I liked it. I still caught some bits, though... You use the word 'past' twice in the first stanza alone. Choose a different word. I think ...

I really like this poem. Just two bits... spelled 'black' wrong. Unless blcak is a word I've just never heard of before. last stanza third line- 'anger to "sweets" ' ...

First of all, it's h-y-p-o-c-r-i-s-y. You spelled it wrong in the title. Second, you skip around a lot. It's very confusing to the reader because we think 'woah, didn't I ...

i don't have any criticism except for one line, 'I bow like a sapling', really drags on the flow and makes us stop and go 'what?' looking for a reference. ...

I agree with Incandescence on some things...but then again, just some! I really liked the first stanza, it reminds me so much of home...*fake sniff* anyway, cool poem. :D I ...

Yes, it was very well written. My only question would be, if this girl Emillie was supposed to be dead, would the sister be just a little more freaked out ...

I thought this was quite good. :D Poetic, to be sure. It wasn't really a story, but that's OK, it did have sort of a plot...*sigh* no critique, for now. ...

Very, very interesting to say the least...*lol* I'm looking hard, but I can't find anything to critique, Morran! This was a great section...if you've got any more I'd love to ...

Yes...I agree. This was very well written. :D Everything seems to be in check...I don't have any critique for you, the only thing I can do is tell you I ...

This poem is interesting, to say the least. :D I'm not really sure the message I got from it yet...still undecided. That's OK when a poem does that, however, as ...

I really enjoyed this poem. You don't just say 'I like to play the piano' and sum the entire poem up in two lines. We have stuff to figure out...it's ...

OK, this poem is pretty good. However, you lose your audience near the last stanza. You make this huge deal about how these 'phantoms' are so bad, and then in ...

What is it with you fantasy people and crystals? *lol* * Ok, you use the word 'fast' and all the other forms of 'fast' way too many times in the ...