thx guys i know it doesn't flow well but i was streesed to the max when i wrote it I'm suprised it doest just say khgkfdhgksghiughdfgh.
Tears and sweat
I don't know when yet.
Questions need answering
answers need questioning.
I don't know whats happening.
I bow like a sapling.
This is not the me that I know.
People have tried to change me
people have failed yet again.
But the blows that are struck
get kinda stuck
I cant help but writhe in pain.
Struck in the heart
bleeding to death,
I lie on the floor and wait.
I hope that you come
I trust that you will.
Don't let me down
They have come for the kill.
I need a white knight on a horse.
I love you as much as is possible for me.
I will always love you, Blessed Be.
thx guys i know it doesn't flow well but i was streesed to the max when i wrote it I'm suprised it doest just say khgkfdhgksghiughdfgh.
i don't have any criticism except for one line, 'I bow like a sapling', really drags on the flow and makes us stop and go 'what?' looking for a reference. Eventually you get it, but it's not readily available inside my head. *lol* I thought it was quite good. 
Questions need answering
answers need questioning.
I need a white knight on a horse.
I love you as much as is possible for me.
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