Rydia

Hi! Firstly, I haven't read any of the previous parts, so if I point out things which you think you've covered in an earlier section, you'll have to use your ...

Hello again! I thought I'd take a look at the next part :) Specifics 1. I was disgusted, but did as Cane said. It took me ½ hour but I ...

Hello! I'm going to start with a few specific comments as I read through and then try to give you some more general advice at the end. Specifics 1. When ...

Hello! Let's have a look at what you have here shall we? Specifics 1. I'm not sure if butterflies is the right word. This normally describes a feeling of nervous ...

Hello! Just a note that I haven't read the first chapter so you'll need to take everything I say with a pinch of salt. If I point out something which ...

Hello! Just a disclaimer that I haven't read the earlier chapters of your story so anything I say here is based on this chapter alone. If you think you've covered ...

Hello! I'm here to review as promised - let's see what you've got here! Specifics 1. Do we need to know that the speaker has rolled over in their bed? ...

Hi! Just a few observations on this piece: 1. Repetition At first the repetition of burn is nice because you create different images with it and manage to make it ...

Hello! Specifics 1. I'd quite like more description or more careful wording surrounding the mannerisms of people. Like the doctor forcing him back down is a little strong, you should ...

I love this so much! Just a few quick observations/ suggestions: 1. On the battlefield they’d come to call their home [I think you need a comma here.] after the ...

Haaiiii! Specifics 1. I wasn’t expecting an angel when the ground around me exploded. I think it would be more dramatic to have this the other way around, so: 'When ...

Hello! This is Knight Rydia reporting for her knightly duty in honour of the KoTGR :) Specifics 1. Alice giggled as she slid into the back of an abandoned car. ...

Hi Eli! Knight Rydia is here to defend the land and review poetry in the name of The Knights of the Green Room! Specifics 1. The first line is lovely ...

Hi Jonathan! I decided I would return the favour and review this poem for you :) Specifics 1. I think your words are really sweet, but a lot of the ...

Hey, here I am as promised! I've roughly got an idea of what the show's about now, but it's probably best to keep in mind that I don't know it ...