Rydia

Oooh time travel! I haven't even read any of this yet but I have this thing about time and I'm writing a super-hero story at the moment about a guy ...

Next chapter! Specifics 1. Oooh a new character! It would be nice to get a few lines about who Greg is/ hints about how he fits into this world before ...

Hello again! Specifics 1. The beginning of this chapter feels like a huge time skip! Maybe you could lead us into it more gently with a little more description of ...

Hello! I don't know what this is a fan-fic of so I'm going in a bit blind but hopefully I can still give some helpful comments on plot/ style! Specifics ...

Specifics 1. By the time the two men made their way to their embassy in the Marcillian Quarter the sun hung precariously over the horizon, carrying with it the last ...

Hello again :) Specifics 1. I'm not sure that yellow and silver clash and I'm trying to decide if you're using the florid to suggest that it's a reddish/ flushed ...

Hullo! It's pretty rare that I review the first part of something so this could be fun :) Specifics 1. Ah the writing a record beginning. These can work really ...

Hello! I love playing with different forms so this caught my attention immediately! I’ve not written a Quatern before but I did my research and it’s similar to a few ...

Hello! So first I want to discuss an issue I have with this poem: it’s very impersonal. Whether it’s intended as a gift for this girl or simply a tribute ...

Howdy, I thought I'd take a look at this. I'm going to make some comments as I read through and then try to give you my overall thoughts at the ...

Hullo! Thought I'd take a look at this one as my first task on Team Tortoise :) Line-By-Line 1. Hair in pigtails, paper in hand, she’s waits at walmart with ...

Hullo! If I point out something you feel you've covered in an earlier chapter then please feel free to ignore me but hopefully you'll find some of my advise useful. ...

Hullo! I've not read any previous parts so if I say anything you feel you've covered in an earlier chapter, please feel free to ignore me! Specifics 1. By the ...

Hello again! I've probably missed a fair few chapters in between but I figured it would be nice to review something where I at least know the characters :) Specifics ...

Hullo! I've not read the previous parts so if I say anything which you feel you covered earlier, please take my comments with a pinch of salt! Specifics 1. "Tell ...