Rydia

There are certain areas I'd rephrase but it's a really good poem. In fact, I'll just make a few changes and then you can use them if you want or ...

Oooh a complex poem.Nice. The imagery in this poem is very vivid and the irregular form works really well. It seems a little fragmented in places and skips from place ...

First, I noticed two typos so let's get those out of the way... In the first stanza, you've mistyped 'when' and in the final stanza you've missed the 't' off ...

I liked this poem but I think you repeated 'last night' too often and a little more imagery would be nice. Also, your language is really simple. Try and expand ...

I have to agree that this is more like prose than poetry. You need to use more imagery and other poetic techniques. I don't really care for the context of ...

This poem was really sweet. The first criticism I have to make is that 'cold' doesn't really rhyme with 'alone' so it disrupts your rhyme scheme a little. I really ...

I like this piece, very creepy. Your imagery is strong and powerful which builds up the atmosphere and the short lines really add to it, especially at the end. I ...

I'll second that those typos need correcting and the rhythm is off in places but this is a nice piece that's easy to relate to. The last two lines of ...

It was very well written but accurate use of language and poetic techniques but I feel that you use repetition just a little too often. Also, in addition to the ...

To say that this was only short, I actually found it repetetive but that's probably because you end two lines with way and two with cry. This song needs more ...

It's a nice little poem but I think you should extend it. Delve deeper into the moral issues and problems surrounding such risky surgery and look at what chance they ...

I liked this piece and I didn't find enough mistakes to merit copying your whole post so here are the lines with their corrections. They're in chronological order so it ...

Okay, this was very good and I only found two or three mistakes so let's get that out of the way first... Jackie nodded. She was Alexandria’s biggest fan. Alexandria ...

First off, I'm not sure that this is a poem. It doesn't have the right structure and it's written like a story but integrates some poetic techniques... I'll let someone ...

Well done to Snoink for finding those mistakes. I just wanted to comment on a few lines... Most friends in the dark, Best friend try’s to help, But when you’re ...