Rydia

So I’m still in Paris, but I’m probably going to post these slowly over the next few days so I don’t drop out of the tortoise race, but I’m going ...

So I’m on my way to Shanghai and I have 15 hours travel time to kill. This is hour 2 and you’ll probably not get this review until tomorrow but ...

Specifics 1. How do they put the manacles on Alsari? Do they open the prison cell and do it while she's still groggy or do they use something on her ...

Hi again! Specifics 1. This was a bad plan. An awful plan, really. So many things could go wrong. I chalked a final symbol down on my circle. It had ...

Next chapter! Specifics 1. I think you need something other than the stone spike to be used as a simile in the second paragraph. It comes across as lazy because ...

Yay, time for chapter two! Specifics 1. She glanced around the room. It was small, with two bookshelves, a bed, a table and a few framed photographs scattered around. Who ...

Hello again! Specifics 1. I was exposed and vulnerable, like a mouse in the middle of a floor. I think there are better similes you could use here because a ...

Hey there, I thought I'd take a look at this :) Specifics 1. I agree with Nikayla that cutting 'your' from the first line improves the flow but I wonder ...

Hey there, thought I'd take a look at this :) Specifics 1. A cars wheels align with a potholed track This would be a stronger opening if you made it ...

Well, I guess this is the final part for now but just let me know when you have the next chapters up and I'll be ready to review :) Specifics ...

Specifics 1. Mr Pondek pursed his lips. “That’s two questions, I’m afraid. You have been given an hour, but I think you probably need three.” Nobody has disputed the number ...

Hullo! So this is the chapter from Steve the woodlouse, awesome :D Specifics 1. Lovely start - it gives us some solid character development and also reminds us who Steve ...

Hey there! So I love these kind of poetry collabs/ games because I think adapting to or mimicking the styles of others can teach us a lot. Specifics 1. I'd ...

Hullo! Specifics 1. “In the beginning there was Mi, belly bursting with fire, chaos, and calm. This took me a few reads because for some reason I first read it ...

Hullo! Specific 1. First 300 words - I want to say that it's too short in some ways and too long in others? Like, I'm a big sucker for really ...