Runelord

That was epic. As soon as I saw repetition of pointless words I wondered wether you were going to mention lack of plot well you didn't disapoint :D. Meyer should ...

Umm... I don't know where to begin. First off I'd like to know how old these children are because it seems to me that if a child who has a ...

It is a good poem in the sense that it reflects the feelings of a child who has been told that Father Christmas does not exist. But it doesn't flow ...

Hi Mad_Moo (nuclear cows on dragons :P) remember me form the chat ? I'll get streight into it then :) She slowed as a scent slithered across the coating of ...

Hi, It's an interesting debut; still there are some things that caught my eye. First, I have to agree with Antigone that everything seems to perfect (but keep the happy ...

Witty and faced paced. Very good for a rough copy :D I think my dad thought I was an emu do you mean emo? still, if you don't keep writing ...

Hi and Welcome to YWS. A prophesy showing the end of the world has provoked a war that threatens to tear apart humanity before the disaster. It is up to ...

Hmm... where to begin, your other reveiws have listed most of the faults, but it seemed to me that I was waching a video with the fast forward on. I ...

No comment... well maybe this one: Awsome He was faithful and trusting, and his adoration knew no bounds, But oh how she trampled his heart to dust, Have you lived ...

Well I like the theme, but the poem itself was a bit confusing without the breaks. Try to make the poem something like this But you think, you ‘know’, I’m ...

I liked it, but the ryming is all over the place... still it's well written you've just got refine it a bit. The feelings you made me feel Replace feelings ...

Very good, but as with all long chapters it has some mistackes: But mostly I didn't run into my ex-boyfriend. This doesn't make any sence... unless you meant didn't want ...

Not bad... for a start. There are a few things that need to change: She slowly slid her feet out of the bed, her pale skin illuminated in the lightning. ...

Interresting start, but I think you need to beef it up a bit... I wrinkled my nose – I didn’t care for the ooy gooey crap. Like this bit alot ...

Ok, it needs some ponctuation, but apart from that it was great, and very true. Creativity is taken away Work is given everyday Imagination is cruelly slain Regurgitation of information ...