Royboy

*sarcasm* Well that wasn't random at all.... Lightening striking down young women into ordinary california science classrooms? No i'm just messing. This story starts out as most adventure stories do: ...

AHHH! I KNOW! I did too! I have it all in a nifty little box. I'm waiting for Lady Friday to get to the damn library already. I'm number 28 ...

“so what is the first thing your going to do when we get back?” So “I dunno, I’m craving for some of Theirina’s cooking though, I’m thinking I ask her ...

Fit it, you shall? Shakespeare or Yoda... haha i'm just messing. I really liked this chapter. The Attack brought up the point in the back of my mind the entire ...

AHHH! Read over your work! Please! I really love the story and all, but just a few nitpicks here and there and you'll throw the entire audience off. If you ...

You're making me emotional. I can't read this just before I'm about to go to sleep again--I'll have trouble accepting the fact that I have to wait for the next ...

All the spaces make it really powerful. It makes you pay attention to the shorter sentences, the ones that matter most. Really thought-provoking, I'd say. I can't find anything in ...

This was interesting. A bit slow of a start, but very good. The introduction to the story seemed contiunuous at some point, but if it's absolutely necessary, then keep it. ...

Ah! I really like it! I've never actually read anything about Sherlock Holmes, so I can't say if his character is off, but that's okay. I noticed in the beginning ...

This is.... the fifth time i've tried to start criting your story.... I swear to god this is the last try. after this, if i can't press submit, then i'm ...

Hey, Stu, whats up? I just got bored, so I thought to myself "Why don't I go crit stuff?" and yeah... “Ask the leaders you serve that tax us too ...

*SOBS* I JUST TYPED UP LIKE SOOOOOOO MUCH AND IT LOGGED ME OUTTT! *sobs* I'm getting so frustrated with this site because it logs me off at random times and ...

Overall, it's a good storyline and the characters are coming into place. I'm just wondering if there'll be any more elves... Anyway--I just found some gramatical errors here and there, ...

And yet again... shortest chapter? "Home is further than you think;" "Please, Creiha, it’s just a little further ." Farther Creiha--She just seems reluctant to go back to her own ...

After everyone else's comments, mine seem a bit bare. First off, I just want to say that this is awesome from what I've just read. I think you're over reacting ...