RoseTulipLily

Happy review day. That being said, let's start this review. I like how you get straight to the point and describe the situation the narrator is in without dillydallying. However, ...

Happy review day. That being said, let's start this review. "The past is prophetic in that it asserts loudly that wars are poor chisels for carving out peaceful tomorrows." ---Martin ...

Happy review day. That being said, let's get started with the review. Criticism: 'You don't know that the impact you have had on my life is quite spectacular.' So while ...

Happy review day. That being said, let's get started with the review. Criticism: 'I hear a male voice speak up, "Made any friends yet?" I discussed a similar thing to ...

Happy review day. That being said, let's get started with the review. This was very emotional and well-written. Although I have yet to experience the same grief as Rosemarie, and ...

Happy review day. That being said, let's get started with the review. Criticism: 'The mansion was so much larger and older than any building she'd been in.' While this sentence ...

Happy review day. That being said, let's get started with the review. First off, let me just say I like your writing style. You clearly know what you are doing, ...

And now for the review of chapter 2! :) Criticism: 'She let it slide all the way down her chin, tickling her neck before she wiped it away.' Not sure ...

Greetings! Let's get straight into the review. Criticism: "She looked a mess, to put it nicely, I almost felt bad for whoever was tasked with cleaning all this up. Blood ...

Greetings! Let's get right into the review! Criticism: “Stop mumbling.” The tall man in front of me said in a deep voice,” If you want to say something, just speak ...

Criticism: 'The piercing shrillness of Seth's alarm woke him up, and he rolled over to silence it. Once it was quiet, he lay there for a moment basking in the ...

'Seth stared down at the bar sullenly.' I cannot help but feel like it might be better to say 'Seth glared down at the bar.' as 'staring sullenly' is pretty ...

Greetings! Your story caught me attention and so here I am! Let's get started with this review! Criticism: "It felt strange and alien, and nothing like home at all." While ...

Sorry for taking so long to review. Not sure if there is much I can say I about this chapter. I was sweet to see the interactions among the characters, ...

Greetings! Let's get started with the review right away. :) 'Words like paint brush strokes fly off my mother's and father's tongues.' While this isn't wrong, it can be easily ...