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I was excited to read a piece of Pokèmon fanfic but unfortunately I didn't enjoy this. I noticed that you said you wanted to make this more "adult" but I ...

Hey there, I'm not so sure this story belongs in the Sci-Fi genre as I think it would be better suited as a Fantasy work. That aside, let's get on ...

I think this piece is so well written. It really captures the same atmosphere of the episode. I like the way you included certain lines from the show, especially "The ...

This piece was an interesting meeting between two interesting characters. I like mystery/detective stories so I thought this would be good to read, and it was. As a technical nitpick; ...

I found this half of the chapter much more pleasing to read as we finally got some insight into the character. Not only did we get biographical detail but we ...

I really can't fault this piece. It gripped me from start to finish and was as compelling as it was terrifying. Your description of the night terrors is outstanding and ...

Hi there! I haven't read a Pokemon fan fiction before so this was interesting. Your writing is very random and seems a little rushed. Something draws Ethan and Mie to ...

This piece shows of your descriptive skill but what starts off as a rather high tempo opening in a chase scene is unfortunately sated by constant narration. It almost brings ...

I enjoyed this piece. Compared to other writings I've read on here about princesses this piece really held my interest but I'm not sure exactly why! You write quite well, ...

This piece is quite short and ambiguous! I liked how you introduced non-human species subtly and smoothly, as opposed to the all too often seen pitfall of "This guy was ...

Hey there, I definitely think this is a massive improvement in style compared to the pieces that precede this one in this series. It's much more pleasing to read and ...

This is almost entirely dialogue with very little description. The structure of your sentences and the huge amounts of dialogue you use is confusing at best and it just doesn't ...

This piece strikes me as being quite vague. I think I understand that these 12 Days stories are part of a 500 - 1000 word challenge, which can often make ...

This piece is pretty intriguing, it's convinced me to go back and read the previous chapters to see what's going on! Overall, the piece needs just a little revision. There ...

No! I was so sad to discover the fate of Arian after A Race For Life . This piece I actually find much more entertaining than the first, despite being ...