RippleGylf

Thank you for the review! I was experimenting and trying just to lowercase "it," but I guess it wasn't clear enough for the reader. I'll go back and fix it.

You're right, the line breaks are a bit off. Thanks for the review. :)

Ooh... Fitzgerald, I suppose. Just for giggles. :D

The first is a typo. It should be "these" XP The second is a Doctor Who reference.

I definitely agree about the title; I really wasn't happy with the old one tbh. The whole "Sparrow" thing is a Doctor Who reference. I'll probably try to rework that ...

It wasn't the words so much as the placement that was random.

I think you're right about that comma. Thank you so much for reading my poem. :D

Oops. The first person POV threw me off. :P I'll go and fix that now.

Thank you so much! :)

So, you've rewritten this first chapter. I think it has been much improved since I last saw it. :) Vivid blades of honey gold streaked through the forest canopy, the ...

Ignore this, I forgot to click review. :P

Oh, no problem! Sorry, I'm still getting used to writing reviews.

We just read it a couple months ago, so it's pretty fresh in my mind

"Bromden's smoke" could refer to the fog that Bromden constantly refers to throughout One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest. While it is a very interesting reference, I'm not sure how ...

That's fine. Writing in another language is quite difficult. Do keep writing!