RippleGylf

I think the metaphor you used is very appropriate. One thing I did notice was the repetition of certain rhymes within the last two stanzas. While I think it works ...

Very interesting premise. As I have not read part 1, I lack a bit of context, but I do think this is pretty good. There are a few instances where ...

The idea of a robot writing this poem is novel in and of itself. It is filled with emotion, and yet is mechanical in feel. The only thing that I ...

This haiku is just flat-out hilarious. :D While it doesn't talk about nature like a traditional haiku would, it is definitely relatable. The simple repetition of one word adds a ...

First of all, I really like how you use onomatopoeia to divide the stanzas, in a way. The use of emphasis in the form of italics also reinforces that division. ...

This is a very interesting concept. The point of view feels a bit awkward at times, but having a narrator who is not the protagonist is a good choice. My ...

I absolutely love the idea behind this poem. The transition from the first stanza to the second is very good, but I think grammatically speaking it should be "is" instead ...

This is a very intriguing start. Initially, I think the adjectives are a bit superfluous, for example, "blue eyes" would perhaps work better than "crystal blue eyes." It is very ...

This is a very nice and heartfelt lyric that I very much enjoyed. Dividing into sections or stanzas (I don't know what term you would use for a lyric) would ...

I like the idea behind this, but it felt very choppy reading it. A lot of the phrasing is awkward, for example: "Benton remained through the Fourth regeneration." This line ...

Very much true. So many YA "bestsellers" copy this very irritating formula, and I think you summed it up nicely. The title is very fitting, in that this formula only ...

While it is entitled Fiberglass, I found it interesting how you didn't mention it in the poem until the very last line, which definitely made me smile. It feels slightly ...

Very impressive. The imagery of the beach at sunset is breathtaking. It manages to romantic without being overbearing. The last line "And naught was lost, not even time." is just ...

This is a very potent argument. Having gone through idiotic essays myself, it does seem stupid sometimes. In fact, it is much more challenging to write concisely instead of packing ...