Rigel

This has no plot. It's a nice little scene, but it has no plot. I can accept this as an exercise in dialogue, but not as a play. The climax ...

I did not like this. Maybe I'm a philistine, but I just did not like this. I don't believe that it's a bad poem, but I did not enjoy reading ...

I liked it. Loved the story and all, and I'm pretty sure that it belongs on the poetry forum. I also understand what you're doing with the punctuation, but to ...

*sighs and takes out large EMO stamp* Unfortunately, this is just one tiny piece in a large, bleeding, crying pile of similar crap. I say, toss it. If you really ...

There were so many grammatical errors in this, I can't even list them all. Go over all your tenses. Kudos on rhyming, though. It was hard to read, but it's ...

Nice idea, very touching and I like the rhyme scheme, when you had it. I am a stickler for flow and scan, though, and this has neither. My advice is ...

There is nothing here. You have given us two hollow husks of characters and some heavy-handed exposition and you ask us to critique them. Generally speaking, you don't post a ...

EDIT IN RESPONSE TO THE POST BELOW: It doesn't change my opinion of the poem one bit if you wrote it when you were 11. If you wrote it upon ...

Fantastic! Sensational! It'll run for years! But seriously, it was good. There were a few places where the dialogue seemed unnatural, but hey, what other problems could there be? Also, ...

That was wonderful. There aren't too many good rhyming poems here, simply because so few people are able to write them. It wasn't cluttered, and you made the structure work ...

Nice. I like what you're saying here. The idea evolved as it went along, and it wasn't too mindlessly positive. A few notes: There's a few places in the beginning ...

wats a deep layered cuff? like his sleeve? lern2poetry plz. Putting that beside, I really liked this. I think that most of the things that could have been covered have ...

Hated it. There are far too many poems about the exact same thing to make me like this. You're presenting something as dramatic that has already been presented too many ...

This was kind of cute. It had a glow, sort of an all-around happy feeling radiating from it. Glow is fine, I see why you liked it, but laser is ...

Forget serious. I giggled inside when I read this, which is so much better than giggling on the outside. Writing in netspeak has been done before, but i liked it. ...