Riedawriter23

Okay I was a bit surprised by this. I was esspecially surprised about how you started you kept the word fuck going through the whole thing. Strangely I liked it ...

Okay I like the top half. I was actually really into the top half. But as soon as I got to the bottom your words sort of became slurred and ...

This was brilliantly done Clau!!! You did have a few spelling errors here and there mostly in Chapter three, but otherwise...Bravo! Great job with this. It was a different and ...

This was really nice. You did a tell thing which I usually don't like but it really turned out to help the poem. I could see the things you were ...

This was pretty good. I agree with Fand it needs some editing but other wise you hve a pretty good poem. I would make the last paragrah you have into ...

This was very sweet and mystical DD. I loved all of your analogies and your descriptions were done very nice. I didn't think it was too surreal at all, I ...

Okay... What doesn't make this poem work is the vauge lines in it. You should have more meat as Incan said. A lot more meat. You need more description and ...

I loved it Dono! And yes I know I already said that but now let me praise your writing without any modest interruptions: 1. I love you cast of characters. ...

This was very different then the other pieces I read of your and still of course I love it. It had that long story feel at first but then after ...

Okay Clau. Well I'll start out with the not so good parts and lead you down to the really good parts which is a much longer list! Firstly, The letter ...

This was nice. It could use a little work as far as vocabulary is concerned though. But otherwise as a really sweet love poem it works. I'm not sure about ...

This was great. I really enjoyed reading this. I'm sorry to say this but I do believe this is the first bit of poetry I've ever read of yours. I ...

I really liked this Jenna. It was Fantasy like I love and it had very interesting characters. What, though I ask, is your main character's power? I kept hearing him ...

Um..this could really use some work. You're lines were bland I couldn't feel it at all as I was reading. And maybe if you even made them longer...maybe. Also I ...

This was...alright. I didn't really like the flow of the whole thing and I you really need help on grammer and vocabulary and punctuation. It was bland mostly and I ...