Riedawriter23

...I didn't see any rhyme. This was a nice poem, got the point across and good word usage. The two stanzas just seem a little un-proportioned to me. I didn't ...

Ooo this was nice Brad. This was nice and calm and yet so informative! The camere gently turned towards the equator. *Just change that to camera. Tis all I found ...

That was a surprising ending. Ch. is still at it?! Omg does that mean that Ariel is still a "bad" person? hehe, I'm still trying to figure out how Kyle ...

Hmm this is very interesting, I like it. There's only one stanza with rhyme though so that sort of threw me off. And I believe grey can be spelled both ...

This was very interesting. :) Claudette pointed out the main things that I noticed. I really didn't get the 3/4 parts, maybe you just put that instead of a comma? ...

This...was....the...best....Pro....EVER! You made a Kyle/Jon kiss last like forever. I totally love you. Even though tis not Kyle... it's not Kyle right? That would be upsetting Lol. Kyle would love ...

See, this was great! I liked how Kyle woke up and immediatly asked where Jon was, that was cute. You did a great job describing the explosion! I could imagine ...

The ending sort of threw me off. Everything was calm and beautiful and descriptive and then we're talking about a man in a black suit and shiny car that said ...

Ooo this is very nice! I like the overall idea and the lines didn't seem forced at all. Everything was in its place. This was great. I think this will ...

I loved this, you write extremely long and descriptive sentences just like I do. Some people don't like them but I've always loved the, what I call, "Dawson's Creek" sentence. ...

This really has a powerful meaning but some lines seem forced to me. It would also help if you parted the last part into two separate pieces so it didn't ...

It is only sheer fantasy, I deceive myself. And in my vile heart I know what it is he desires *This is my favorite line. My least favorite line: ...I ...

Ooo, I love this poem. Very simple, short, and great meaning. My favorite part is: Trimmed, short willows Arms held in false praise Wearily guard your walls. Black iron rails, ...

Like as if the sound had been switched off. It also felt like I was numb. *This would sound better as: As if the sound had been switched off. I ...

I stole a penny from the college change jar and flicked the heads of every French Bourbon against the tail of our relationship, wagging and frayed *This is my favorite ...