Riedawriter23

I love this.:) It's so simple and emotion filled. I didn't expect the I love you to come...but it was sweet. lol. The air was like a nerve gas: neither ...

I liked this one more so than the last one. I think this may be my third favorite. The imagery seemed a lot better and I like how it sounds ...

I did like this but only because the last stanza showed peaks of the other two poems. I felt that this one didn't have as much imagery as the others. ...

I did like this one better. Both are beautifully written but yet so different in style and word usage. The world is hushed in anticipation For lights can be seen ...

I really liked this. It had the rugged voice of war and yet read so poetically. Again...first stanza has already been mentioned lol. Otherwise I see nothing wrong here. Carrion ...

There are many spelling errors and the punctuation needs fixing but...I really do love this. The story that it tells is wonderful. This is dramatic but I think it would ...

Besides the spelling errors I liked this. At times I did kind of fe read this before, only because the words deep and dark are often combined to the word ...

I liked this. The last line didn't bother me so much until Snoink mentioned the 1950's movies...lol, but otherwise it was alright. I think the rhyme worked out really well. ...

Besides punctuation as has been mentioned, I really liked this. The beginning was very catching and interested me with their rhythm. It was sort of choppy in the second stanza ...

It does have a certain beauty to it but there are just too many words for me in the first few stanza's. It seems like you're trying to over-describe what's ...

I...kinda get it? At first impression I was understanding it but them it just sort of turned on me and I felt like there were too many words without meaning ...

I do like the simplicity of it all. And overall while reading this in sort of a beautifully blunt way, the line breaks almost fit. I admit that some changes ...

I did like this, as Kylan said, it was more emotion filled. I couldn't help but notice though that through the last four stanzas I felt like I was reading ...

As far as feelings were concerned, you got them out. As far as clarity goes, it could use some work. A lot of your sentences didn't make much sense and ...

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