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Oh, to touch her hand again. To see her smile. To kiss her gray head. Simple things I felt I’d always have Though I knew better And when the better ...

I agree, this is really beautiful. I don't have anything for you to improve - Cicero and Shriek touched on anything I might've considered. I also really like the character ...

This should be rated R for use of the f-word. Also please capitalize your 'I's'. Additionaly, I think you should take out the lines through some of the words, the ...

I haven't reviewed poetry recently, but I had to for this one. I love this poem. It is brilliantly crafted and expressed, and there is nothing (in my opinion) to ...

I like the style of this piece. I like the short, quick and sometimes interrogative dialogue. Your dialogue really sets a tone for this - its some of the most ...

Hey again, First off, there are a number of spelling mistakes in this. Before you post, use the Spell Check button and correct any misspellings. Also there are no paragraphs. ...

That was really beautiful, gyrfalcon. I love your descriptive words and your imagery. I can really see the autumn scene in my head. It also had a really good flow, ...

trident - This was really well written. Your style is very well developed, and it flows brilliantly. The story is also interesting, and the characters are very three-dimensional. It was ...

I really liked this too. Like Dream Deep I think you have a very distinct voice and style. The story itself was also really good - the plot is interesting ...

This poem seems sort of empty. To me, it has no lasting effect on the reader, and the phrases are rather clichéd. The last stanza also completely changed perspectives - ...

I think this is a really good poem. It gets its message across very effectively. This is one of the most heartfelt poems I have read in quite a long ...

Solitude Come to my heart with a mask of purple, gold and green, come with your twisted candlestick smile, come with kisses and lies and wilted roses and maybe I ...

Hmm, in general this poem seems sort of clichéd to me. Alot of the phrases, like 'Two souls entwine' or 'Two hearts become one' in specific felt rather clichéd. Also, ...

Wonderful blue sky, Parachute fly high up through The Clouds of freedom. I don't think the line 'wonderful blue sky' really fits in with the rest of the poem. That ...

I really did like this poem. It has wonderful imagery and beautiful ideas. My only suggestion is to maybe space it out into stanzas, just because it's easier for a ...