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Huh? This was a strange piece. First off, I like the title, "Ranting with Style". It got me interested to start reading it but I feel like it's not a ...

I really like this story. First, I like your range in vocabulary and your descriptions are pretty good too. The beginning was a good hook making us unsure of his ...

When I finsihed your story I am wondering if your going to conitinue. I find that it serves a reader a good problem for the protagonist but there was no ...

Hey there, great story. It's womderfully mysterious and I wonder what is going to happen next...if there is a part two. There are a few nitpicks though. "He tells me ...

Oh my gosh this was adorable. Bizarre comment I know but it's something so trival and relatable I had to say it. I loved the rhyming too. I have not ...

This such a depressing story and it did tug at my heart strings. I love the amount emotion here in this paragraph. The mood and tone is set perfectly and ...

The thing that stuck out to me the most is the premise. I am interested to see if it's a Laya descending into some strange uncontrol madness or if Mercy ...

This is an interesting story...Anyways I first like to say the character was pretty relatable to me. I also overthink things and get paraniod when that people dislike me as ...

Oh my gosh foreshadowing and a twist. You are making this more interesting as the chapters go on! I love how your opening fascinating plot possibilities for yourself. I am ...

To start off I like the beginning. It is not the most suspecful start but it did give me a little bit of the rush of her hurrying to get ...

I really enjoyed this story. There was a good vocabulary and you have a good grasp of you characters. I like the setup of Lara needing to get over this ...

Wow that was a unique story.....killer youtubers.... Okay first of all I would say more description and better word choice but then again I was kind of glad it was ...

This is adorable!! I find that this story would kind of be hard to critique because you wrote it when you were around 8 and it's so simplistic. I don't ...

This is a fantastically written story! I admire the very well done descriptions and how it talently conveys the actions and look. Your vocabualry is very strong and had a ...

Your story is alright. I think you have a lot of minor problems too like okay is spelled o.o.k.a.y and the way your spelling looks lazy. Also with quotes they ...