RedRaven

Nice work. One thing I found peculular was the e-mail format. It made me feel somewhat... disconnected with the story. I suppose where it wasn't in paragraphs and such. But, ...

This was really good. The title intrigued me, a lot. One thing that I'd suggest though, is re-arranging it. When I read the beginning, it didn't connect well with the ...

Oh, sorry if I'm confusing! :( The reason may be because of where I switch POV's in each chapter. In the first chapter, I wrote it from Isabella's point of ...

Thanks for the critique :) Most of my story is in present tense. I put that passage in past tense to show that it was something she DID not something ...

Nice poem. It was short and catchy. I liked some of your descriptive words. Keep writing! - RedRaven

This was a great poem. One of the best that I've read in a while! It was hilarious. I seriously couldn't stop laughing. Good job! - RedRaven

I liked this. A lot. One little thing I'd suggest to you though would be to fix your punctuation. Oh, and you should divide your poem into stanzas so it's ...

peanut19 basically covered what I wanted to say. Overall, I liked the poem. It could use some fixing up in regards to puncuation and spelling. It was a good poem, ...

Sorry if I caused anyone grief! I'll delete this now and re-work it or something. - RedRaven

I know it does. I was reading it and decided to use something like it in my novel.

This was a sad piece. But, it was really interesting. It was nice to see a different side of a suicidal character. I enjoyed it and would like to see ...

This was an okay poem. I liked some of the lines, but as Jagged said, some don't make sense. Keep writing! - RedRaven

I liked this poem. The flow was very nice, as was the imagery. I can't wait to read you're novel once you publish it! Good luck with it, RedRaven

I liked this. It was very fast paced. The only suggestion I'd have for you would be to put more emotion into it. It's all telling, there's no showing.

Thanks for the critique! I'll work on expanding her history and such as the novel progresses.