Burn, fill us with warmth
You make us feel happy
And filled with joy.
You make me feel this way,
But not as much as love, I say.
For it fills me with warmth
You cannot toy.
Don't even try,
Don't even dare,
For this love I have
Does not even compare
To your warmth that you
Contain.
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Nice poem.
It was short and catchy. I liked some of your descriptive words.
Keep writing!
- RedRaven
i liked your metaphor, how you compare passion with a burn. but to tell you the truth it felt kind of awkward when i read it. overall it was a good poem.
Nice poem it was short, sweet, and to the point.
Love is still a confusing word for me and I know its not fair
,but to you I plainly see that nothing can compare.
The poem (though short lived) was filled with emotion and I raise my glass to it.
Again I say great work even though Love for me is just a girl's trick!
Your simple reviewer,
-Dawn
Wow thanks Lily!
i love your poem allot! I is very catchy and creative! keep on writing!
Yeah it's really not that great. I actually wrote it for school quite a while ago but I felt like publishing it to see what other people think. Thanks tho!
<3 Sara.
It is a very short poem.When you talk about the "us" in your poem I wish you would elaborate. I would change
I think that this line sounds a little awkward.I think you should replace "toy" with a stronger word.
I think you should work on your rhythm a little bit more.
Hopefully that helps.
Have a great night Fiction.