RedRaven

This was fantastically well-written! This was really interesting. The plot was good. I like the way you described certian things. I also loved your introduction. I don't have anything critical ...

I liked the idea of the poem. I wasn't expecting the ending twists. A few things I'd suggest for improvement: 1) Stanzas: Splitting your poem into stanzas would make it ...

Hey Hibiscus, I liked your poem. You had good uses of imagery. I noticed a few things though that you could improve on: 1) You slip right through crinkled fingers...of ...

I liked the beginning - you grabbed my attention right away. The thing is though is that you have to keep it that way. The rest of your story didn't, ...

This was good for your first poem. A few things I noticed though were: 1) Description. You should describe the hole more. The reader knows that there's a hole, but ...

This was interesting, and slightly creepy. I loved the "sadistic delight" part because it gave the character such a creepy edge. Anyway, good work! :) I'm starting to like your ...

Overall, I liked this poem. I loved your word-choice. One thing I would watch though, would be how you place your words. Some of your poem was a bit confusing. ...

I loved this. The only thing I'd reccommend though is that you expand it. I'd like to see more :P My favourite part of this was Molly's dialouge. It added ...

Like those above me noticed, I have a few things to note: 1. In the beginning, I couldn't tell what was going on. I realized after that the characters were ...

Hi Dante, This poem was very interesting! I liked it and I enjoyed your use of imagery. A nit-picky thing though: [quote] Come meet me where the sun shines. This ...

Hello! Overall, I liked this piece. It was nicely paced, and I liked your writing style. The only thing nitpick-y that I found with this was: Traffic was still as ...

I liked this, espically the way you intertwined pyschology with it. I found it kind of long, but other than that it was good. The only think that I didn't ...

This piece threw me off a little bit. I enjoyed it, but I do have a few suggestions. 1. Some of your grammer wasn't good. [I'd highlight the bits that ...

I tried to read this, I honestly did. I liked what I read though. To make this smaller, I'd suggest for you to publish each chapter seperately. I think if ...

This was good, but I don't think these two paragraphs fit in with the rest of the story. Other than that, good work! . Isaac’s love of football was always ...