Rayneisthename

This was great! I liked the subtle rhyming you had going on. Don't worry, I also have the Incapablity-to-write-happy-things-syndrome. But that isn't bad!!!! The best ideas come out of depressing ...

This was interesting poem. It does feel that you wrote this from a personal experience so I won't say too much. She’s just so full of life, And always so ...

This was a good piece but I wasn't exactly sure what kind of rythme you were going for, it didn't rhyme in the beginning and then suddenly it does. This ...

OH MY DEAR LORD!!!!!!!!!!!!:000000

This was kind of confusing considering how little conversation you had going on. The description was absolutely lovely though, it was like I was there, which is hard to accomplish. ...

This story is so well written I can't put it into words! It sends a wonderful message to people and that really says good things about you as a person! ...

This was really good, it kept my interest the entire time. The little blurb at the end kind of confused me, maybe you could reword it, so it doesn't leave ...

I find this poem very refreshing and kind of brings us all back to those days of stuffed animals and just being a kid. This poem, I don't know why, ...

Its very good, until it gets to the end. You kind of let the rhythm of the poem go, which I really liked the rhythm of it. Plus the end ...

This is a really good poem!!!I can totally relate to this. I actually didn't think that the ending was that bad. Maybe you could change it to something like this: ...

short and sweet, I like it. I'm just not really sure what this poem is about, and (this is probably a typo)but you could say your in the last line ...

Interesting....But very well done! I only have minor adjustments. You keep repeating that the girl is young, but you could still probably say how old she looked at least and ...

I agree with ireylcadance that these are beautiful peices and I hope you will continue to write. I write poems all the time in math class too, its okay......;) -Rayne

I like the first part a lot, but then it seems to get kind of sad. The only problem I have with this poem is a portion of the second ...

Awwwww, this is wonderful. You definetly kept my interest and it made me really sad at the end to know that she died. All I can say is awwwwwwww..........:( This ...