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Dude your poem confuses me. :) But the imagery's great and it seems to have a story to it. I like it. But it still confuses me. Maybe that's why ...

Yeah, I have to agree with EMzee on this one. This poem has so much flow and passion to it. I really like it. keep it up :)

thanks :) I appreciate it. I'll revise this chapter with your tips in mind. Also, I revised the first chapter from since you last saw it. If you could give ...

hey thanks naplemaster. YOu pointed out somethings that I didn't even noticed in the revision stage. Any way my novel is called The magician's War. It's in the fantasy section. ...

oh no that's okay. I just really need someone who can read my stuff for me. I'm gonna finish this one.

oh then could a monitor delete it for me? My bad.

hey i'm looking for someone who can really rip through this and junk. Tell me what's wrong with it and where I need to fix it not just conceptually but ...

Yeah, I don't even know. I just started writing it this morning and I meant to put it on here as a rough draft and pressed the wrong button. :D ...

Everybody thanks for the advice.=) i liked all of the comments. Areida,I don't think I'll take the periods away because if I did it'd take away from the statement in ...

Hey! thanks for all of the comments. =) I appreciate the reviews.

Thanks, i'll try that. I'm working on a poetry piece as a present for a friend of mine's birthday. And I just want it to be something special ya know?

thanks for the comments. And yea i do have to fix the tense issues that's mostly because I wasn't sure if I wanted to be in past or present tense ...

There aren't many poems that I've come out and said that I like on here and this is one of them.Sorry my comments not some helpful dialogue that most others ...

thanks =) I guess I could've done smell. Lol I totally forgot about that.