Quinine

I really like this! Excellent descriptions. Here are some suggestions I have to make it better. 1. Original: "The freezing wind bit through Aria’s stiff coat like a knife." To ...

Nice poem, the tone really portrays what the girl is feeling. However, I have a few questions about this. I don't mean to offend but- 1. The poem says that ...

Very interesting and well written! A few suggestions: 1. "Your cochlea, a messy, inflamed hell." This sentence is grammatically incorrect. Suggested Fix: "like the smallest snail's shell, / your cochl

Grammar and Punctuation Fixes: 1. "My family thinks I'm a killer, I won’t lie I’ve thought about slicing them up." Needs to be broken up a bit. Fix: "My family ...

I really like this poem-short yet sweet, not spelling out the event yet portraying it. My only suggestion for you is to keep up a more consistent structure-This "The erroneous ...

Very vivid and gripping poem. I must congratulate you on your ability to eloquently and vibrantly express such raw emotion. That being said, here are a couple ways to improve ...

Nice, here are a few things you could fix: 1. "Earlier that day, I had had breakfast with my parents, was put in the back of the car, with my ...

Nice poem, very vivid :D Kudos to you! Only fix the capitalization and punctuation mistakes, including the lower case Is (in the case of i that means the pronoun I, ...

Very interesting story! I have a review for you, mostly some tips to improve it :) You don't have to take my advice though, it's just my opinion. Here are ...

This is going to be a short review :) Ha ha, nice :D That one made me laugh. I have a few suggestions: 1. The rhythm and structure of the ...

*Please note that is piece of constructive criticism will focus on the negative aspects and not the positive ones, but that is not to say the story is poor. Anyway ...

Nice poem! This is pretty good, with a interesting and unusual situation. However, I suggest that you make the wording more colorful and interesting, to explore the full potential of ...

This is a short chapter, so here's my short review: 1. Like I had mentioned in the text above, the chapter is rather short. I would suggest trying to the ...

Interesting poem! Here's my short review- 1. In the first line, it says that the road was "craved" with puddles. I think this may be a typo, based on the ...

This appears to have some very interesting ideas and a promising story line, but I have some concerns that I have with this chapter. Bear with me as I explain. ...