Qoh16

Actually I was raised in New York City thank you. And its not supposed to be accurate. It was just a backdrop for the story. The technical stuff isn't accurate ...

Thanks for your comments. Yeah I know it's rough, it's my first draft. So I expected the comments to be harsh.

i loved it,\. every father needs to tell this to their daughters

Im sorry but i cant say i liked this. I didnt hate it. But i didnt like it. I guess it was too personalforme. But i u where the girl ...

HAHA!!! I thought this was hilarious!!! And of someone who sees this all the time in my school, i can totally relate. But i don't wear those types of clothing ...

All I am going to say is you need to PM when Chapter 11 is up!!!

This was a really good story. The title kind of threw me off a bit. Other than that good luck and Happy Writing XD :D Qoh16

I honestly was confsued. I couldn't figure out who was talking half the time. But once you fix that, I think it shall be a great story and you should ...

This was really good. But I am wondering where this is going. It is a very interesting start. Needs a little work but a really good start. Hope you post ...

OMG...THIS IS BEAUTIFUL

I WANNA SEE THIS MOVIE SO BAD!!

OMGGG!!! I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!

I totally feel you. Trust me I get it. How i feel is exactly like this.

Sorry chica. But i agree with ButterFinger. It does read more like prose than actual poetry. But it is a very good job. Keep it up. Happy writing!!! :) 16

Thank yah!! but im still havin trouble with the second part of his story :(