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:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D Great.... again. can't wait to read more of this. Amazing beginning. 10/10 :D :D :D :D I am ...

umm... Okay. The comma/period thing was weird. "stuff happened," didn't fit... but people have already said these things. You should keep writing this, but make the time period clear. And ...

WOW! That is very, very, very, good. (I would add more verys, but I don't want to annoy anyone) You were nervous about posting that? 11/10. I can't wait to ...

Great introduction. Most dragon books are fantasy, so this one should be really interesting. I can't wait to read more! 10/10, definately :D :D :D :D

Wow... you really improved it from the original version. The first one was repetitive, and you managed to get the same message across in better words. :) :)

Really like it- It would make a great song for a feast in a book (I'm not sure what you were planning to use it for) and it was very ...

lol... all I have to say is :lol: :lol: :lol:

love it... very peaceful. can't wait to see more of your writing. :D :P 8) :)

:D :D :D Love the dramatic ending. Can't wait to read your first chapter. "Grelt" is a great name. :D :D :D

I really liked this- the plot seems promising My only problem is the name Deski-it just doesn't seem like it would fit into the time frame. There are some minor ...

I agree with Ofour and Jules the jester. It was okay. It could turn out to be really great, but I can't really tell yet. Swingwing=swinging (right? :P ) :elephant:

:lol: :lol: Loved the chaos and disorder in this poem! Amazing for that age! :lol: :lol:

I liked this I really like the idea that one action can create a chain reaction. Some of it wasn't very well-written, but overall it was very good (and I ...

Cool! I loved it. I am a huge Harry Potter fan myself. You should definately keep writing this. :D :D :D