Poopsie

holy guacamole Hi Flum (and I guess woahitherepal). I guess what I want to start with is the fact that the poem could literally end on the 17th line. "I ...

Hi shusher, I guess your poem just isn't my style, rather it is written in a style I don't normally see. Your poem is clear and concise as stated below, ...

i think @StupidSoup means while the imagery is pretty cool, a ton of lines can be taken out and you'd still end up with the same poem. You keep restating ...

This poem strikes me as an articulation of one of those darker times. This one feels like it takes place specifically after a breakup or loss of someone. Makes me ...

I'm just here to look at flow you can drop the with in the second line I'm pretty sure you've done the best you could with the third line. you ...

yo its poop guy leggo. Diving right in I see you have a great handle on imagery. You also don't let said imagery cloud your theme. Each line brings a ...

Hi jam! You seem to have a real cool format going on here. As much as I like the concept of the story you tell here, I can't really attribute ...

hey chocolate guitar, I suppose i should jump right in here. At a glance this looks and feels a lot how I wrote poems. A crap ton of imagery trying ...

Hey lum berry, (grinding to post a thing) You probably know this, but I just generally like your writing style. It is concise without being bland, that is to say ...

holy gosh didddly. Was this supposed to be dark? Because it certainly came off as that. Anyway, this is a review. To start, I do like some of the imagery ...

hi, this is a review. To start, I really liked the imagery in this piece. I especially liked the way you chose to describe the apparent relationship between the character ...

hey there buddy. I have a major problem with this work. Not because its bad, but because it has SOOO much potential. I can feel something behind this concept, which ...

Snaperoo my dood. That's a pretty spoopy poem u got there. I see you're new here. Welcome to YWS. As im sure you know, we primarily review and offer constructed ...

This poem feels like it follows a theory of, "it's not what you say, it's how you say it that makes it unique." What I mean is, this poem seems ...

Hi! This, at least to me is a very unorthodox form of poetry, and to be honest, I'm not sure it works very well as it is. The formatting gives ...