Hi shusher,
I guess your poem just isn't my style, rather it is written in a style I don't normally see.
Your poem is clear and concise as stated below, but I can't really find a specific meaning in it. Because of this I can't sympathize with anything in the poem. You use redundancy as a tool here, that is you say the same line twice for a reason I cannot understand. You're asking someone for mercy, then thanking them for being merciful. I'm not sure if this is a religious piece or a melancholy piece. I think you should add on to this, it could end up being great!
-poop guy
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