Pompadour

Hey Brielle! Pompadour here to review! So, as far as I can see, this could use a bit of work. The character's voice is very bland and emotionless. The first ...

Pompadour here for a review on this review day... er, night. Sorry, it's night here. Ok, so first off... OW! The capitalization sort of strained my eyes. It's annoying and ...

Pompadour here for a review! *surreptitiously pulls quill out* ( Red Knights are uncool if they don't have quills.) This poem was fuzzy and sweet. I love it! I like ...

Man the catapults! Let down the drawbridge! Knight Pompadour here for a review! Sorry, couldn't resist. =P I love your poem! It's... different. But I feel like your tense gets ...

l could so relate to this! It is indeed "hunger" we feel while lost in our books. The first...er... stanza or verse or whatnot, could use some editing though. I ...

Hey! So your story could use a bit of work. It felt weirdly disconnected in a few places. You were very abrupt at one point as dragonofphoenix has pointed out. ...

Hey SageN! Pompadour here to review! OK, so maybe it's just me, but your beginning seems a bit abrupt. I think it's be more effective if you began by talking ...

This was interesting in a funny way! I liked the idea, because usually when someone tries something like this it just looks childish, but as the story wove on you ...

Hey Malachi! Pompadour here for a review. I liked the idea behind your poem and how you chose to execute it, I really do. But I feel that your rhyming ...

This is really intense! Frankly, I found your prologue to be quite interesting, but sort of wish that we could have a clearer image of the character. I mean, there ...

Let's cut to the chase. Yep, you really need to stop using replacements for "said." Using all these "exclaimed," "cried," "shouted" thingies tend to divert the reader's attention from the ...

This is so sweet and honest! I liked how you've repeated "Sometimes being a big brother means..." so effectively. The poem is simple and maybe that's why it's all the ...

Hey Frances! I'm here for a review! So first things first, you need to set a proper format. It's annoying to read the poem like this. It's ok if your ...

Ok, so I don't normally read dark short stories, but I couldn't keep my hands off this one! I felt it was all right for there to be..er.. a little ...

Hey lostthoughts911! Pompadour here for a review! OK, so first things first, the title! You've spelled "beginning" wrong. Do set it right immediately! Also, your intro is very abrupt. It's ...