Poltergiest

Hm... I thought it was good. MAbye it should go in poetry but... Thats just me being stupid. Okay, I don't think I could find any gramatical errors or anything ...

HHHHHHOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRAAAAAAAAA-... OKay, I'm gonna stop doing that for every post. Okay. First of all, I would mention how big the crate is cause when you say crate I think you ...

Hooooorrrraaaayyyyyy!!!!!! Yea, I'm back and now I'm gonna crit the rest of your story. Hooray! Ahem. Uh, I liked it as much as the rest of the parts. I still ...

YYYEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!! Your stories back up! Hooray! Ahem! Okay, the begining was a tad bit confusing. I realized you needed to get the point across that she couldn't move but you ...

TOAST!!! Okay... I'm not sure if this was suppose to be funny poetry or serious. It came to me as without much feeling. It had some good funnyness in it ...

It was really good. I like how they still managed to decieve deLucio even though they were lying. ONe thing, I get Shyzel have different clans and whatnot but explian ...

It was pretty good. I like the whole hacking wizards thing, it was new. I think it drew back to a Harry Potter thing every now and then but I ...

Okay, this is seriously really good. I love the names and Blueman. He's cool for some reason. Execpt don't describe him with flabby muscles. You reminded me of my granpa ...

That was one of the coolest things I've ever read. I'm reeally not just saying that. You created an in depth world and you really made me want to read ...

It was good. Mabye a little short but nevertheless. I can't tell whats going on much. Although it was very descriptive I think you should post longer ones. I like ...

Very sweet! First of all I love how deLucio blocked forest spirit, (Still can't remember her name! AH!) with the burned gtrass and stuff. It was really good. Oh, Kiera ...

It made me feel... Empty. As most poetry does. And as I've told everyone who I have posted this reply on I'll tell you. Me feeling empty is a good ...

The fact that Mrs. Weasley swore at all is mindbogling and aw inspiring. Realy... I LOVED the ending! :mrgreen: What was everybodies fav. part?

Very good. I think you could have slipped in the last part with Kiera in part 1 however... Anyway, I think he king is a fat, stupid idiotic fool who ...

I completely loved it. Especially the part where Kiera kept cutting off her mom. I wish I could do that. Anyway, I didn't really understand the part with Brad and ...