Pippiedooda

Hi, this is my first entry here so it would be great to hear any comments anyone has on it and any ways to improve the story. Thankyou very much ...

I wanted to focus more on action instead of lengthy descriptions so gave it a go at writing something short, any comments would be really helpful “How dare you speak ...

I'm thinking of using this as the start to a story and would really appreciate any coments on how to improve and whether i should carry on with it. Thanks ...

Thankyou for all the reviews I got on the begginning! I was really stuck on how to continue as it was one of those things that I just started writing ...

This part needs some work so any reviews would be very much appreciated! I know the story switches back and forth quite a bit but thats just for the beginning, ...

Thanks again for everyones reviews! I've written some more on her room and looks, if some of this doesn't make a great deal of sense (some things said by Filo) ...

I need to work on this part more so any comments would be great! She wanted to scream, she wanted to hit- but she couldn’t. And the darkness was closing ...

Hello again Sorry it took so long- I'm very unsure about this part. The more I read through it the more unhappy I am! Reviews would be very helpful- I ...

Hi here's number 7 All the reviews I got last time were brilliant so thanks to everyone who commented on part 6! This part has some explanation but it may ...

Hi sorry it took a while, I've had a ton of coursework to do I haven't been able to go over it much so I'm not very happy with it- ...

This has got to be the trickiest part to write so far!! I haven't been over it enough and I think it needs editing so point out as much as ...

Let me know what you think! I'm not too happy with this one All reviews are welcome, I really think I need some help in going over my work. Thank ...

Sorry it took so long to post this part! Its a bit longer than usual too but I hope its not too much- things are a bit slow moving at ...

Sorry it took ages! I had a few busy weekends and I have been having trouble with this part, I'm really not very happy with it. Its not very eventful ...

So here's the next part! Thanks so much for everyones helpful comments on my last piece Hope you like this one! She lay her hand on the cool handle, turning ...

Well this is supposed to be a happy story and those of you that read my normal work will know that I more stick to the fantasy/horror area in writing ...