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I like how you started with Rhys' parents meeting, and I also love the almost poetic vernacular. Please, when you have the next part posted, tell me!! :)

I agree with ItalianIlluminist about the ending. But I absolutely love the dialogue! It seems natural, you know, for teens. Tell me when you have the next chapter up!! :D

thank you! :D

This is really funny, in a good way. I love the 'breviations. :D

thanks :)

Your welcome! Also, welcome to YWS! :)

Wow, even in this little piece there was so much emotion. I like how you ended it. My only nitpick: in the first line you should say "Sitting on her ...

This prologue is excellent! I agree with the others about length, but it's not a major problem at all. I'm just wondering something: did the main character already know about ...

Hello Rava100! I like this a lot, mostly because it actually explains what love ISN'T, and I thought it was cool how in between stanzas you stated what love IS. ...

I love this. Just like Nargles said, it sent shivers through me. The melancholy ring to this helped make it such a strong piece. Honestly, I think I want to ...

I love this. Just like Nargles said, it sent shivers through me. The melancholy ring to this helped make it such a strong piece. Honestly, I think I want to ...

This was really sweet. Even though you only described the porch swing I could imagine it on a porch of a large house in spring with trees and a nice ...

Awwww thanks!! :)

Thanks for the comments! Yeah, I'll definately try to work with the flow of the whole things. Thanks for all the tips! :D

Thanks for the nice comment! Actually you got it spot on, so kudos to you! :D Also, thanks for the tips, I'll think about how I can incorporate that in. ...