PhoenixBishop

Phoenix lands for a review. Everyday I'm in my room, Everyday I hit the on snooze , Don't think the on is necessary. Just hit the snooze Everyday I go ...

Phoenix lands to review. * He sleeps. He's cold. But he has to sleep. He knows he's usually not cold when he sleeps – maybe this is not sleep. But ...

Welcome to YWS. I'm Phoenix here to review your story. Although since it's a prologue I assume this is to a working Novel. In which case this should be in ...

Phoenix here to review. I sort of agree with Esme. This is telling, a common occurrence in prologues. You could take this time and make all this information into actual ...

Hey grimmy, Phoenix here to review. I fell to my knees before the stream, I was shaking so violently drawing each breath became a challenge, and wiping the drying blood ...

Phoenix here for a review. I find the creation of the Medusa we all know very fascinating. I like your interpretation of how she got to be her snake like ...

:) Phoenix here to review your piece. :smt003 Overall I think it was a great idea. Like the review above said the idea for a Death song is very interesting ...

Phoenix here. By the way this is a really cool idea. I wanted to do something like this for my mom. Anyway the first half's repetition lends itself more to ...

Hi I'm Phoenix and I'm here to review It was black. Pitch black. The moon shone brightly in the sinister black sky as it glided like a ghostly ship across ...

Phoenix here to review. I guess she had every reason to be all happy and excited, because this is the first time she's been able to get me to wear ...

Phoenix here to review. “Fine, but we’ve got to go quickly. I don’t want to risk using my powers in front of mortals.” Why does he worry this. The only ...

Phoenix landing to review. Regan Smith kicked the path, sending small, white stones skittering across the park lawn. She was bored, having nothing to do other than to idle away ...

First off, since this is based off of a another piece of work. This would be better suited for the FanFiction Forum. :D The moss was making it harder, but ...

Phoenix here to review. She brushed her long, silky blonde hair out of her eyes and bent down To much description on the hair. Long and blonde is enough. Two ...

Phoenix here again. I hope I'm not annoying you. :elephant: I lengthened my steps, hoping to escape these painful words. I knew that child; I had babysat her many a ...