Periablo

Pretty cool. I liked it quite a bit, it was more original than most runaway stories I read. There were a few weird things about it though. Like, the cut ...

I thought that that was pretty sweet. I liked the whole "cloud 9" "cloud you" thing. It was totally an original poem, and that's what made it so awesome. To ...

I liked it. It was pretty heartwarming, I gotta say. And I really loved a few lines, like the one about her dinner plate sized eyes, and "Sadness. Like when ...

Really good poem, seriously. I don't really have much to say about it that hasn't been said but I just wanted to tell you that I really liked the line: ...

Man, that was fuckin' great. I love that ending, seriously. I expected some kind of "I love you" thing, and instead I got that. It was amazing. Besides that, the ...

Cool poem. All I have to say to fix it up is that in the middle you say "And we can face to world today" and I think you meant ...

Haha, awesome. Great use of imagery and such, it sounded really good and you compared a secret to some cool things. So my one thing is that it sounded weird ...

I really liked it :D. The first stanza had great imagery and it fit well. I agree with that person above though, the dreamer with the sting is weird. Something ...

Haha! That's great! I love it, I really do. It's such a good way to introduce a reader to your world, while not sounding "tell-y" or whatever we call it. ...

Alright, so I'm not positive on how to review a monologue, but here are my comments: First I got a couple of weird grammar or spelling things or whatever. To ...

I don't have much to say besides that that was genuinely amazing and it made me feel really good inside. You are a great writer and I have to thank ...

"I want to wake up from this nightmare, but it doesn't work that way I'm afraid." in the very beginning should have a comma in between "way" and "I'm", i'm ...

That was pretty great. You made me care for the guy by mentioning his daughter and then you made me really angry by having him get shot and then with ...

I personally liked it. I mean, yeah it wasn't "proper writing technique" but many amazing authors can write away from the norm. The dialogue was written wrong, kind of like ...

I just read chapters one and two and I think this is really an amazing story so far. Your a great author and I look forward to the next chapters. ...