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I think you'll be completely fine with reading one without having read the other, Gwen. I can't even remember them being hugely connected, not in your typical sequal manner. They're ...

Jonathon slipped his arm around Sarah's waist and felt her hips take on the exaggerated rise and fall stilettos conferred as they walked inti the club. - “inti” – into. ...

"The little boy couldn’t have been more than seven. He was a cute little guy; with cheeks just plump enough to be cute without being babyish or fat. He had ...

"Dr. Graham?" Joanne, the new receptionist, asked. He had insisted she call him "Jon," but she refused to be informal. He liked that about her; she was almost his age, ...

The point to take home today, if nothing else, is that living produce entropy, or chaos. - I think here you meant “produces” or perhaps “living things”? either way, it’s ...

Oh, darling, you were going so well until you ended with "I wonder" Lol. I like it, really I do. As soon as I started I wanted to know more, ...

Nick is adorable and I wish to take him home with me to whinge and steal forever. ^^ I think you've done well in a short post to show us ...

This is really cute, Rieda, and I like it. The rhyming works and I like where you've decided to place the line breaks. A small issue comes with your last ...

Okay, just a quick note: “Dave awoke” awoke sounds awkward and odd here, I’d suggest using a simple “woke”. I also love the thought’s running through his head here, totally ...

Hallo there! Welcome to YWS. ^^ Fourteen muddy rangers aimed their swords towards the countless Kalbarcs. Each bearer muttered a silent prayer under their breath. Just the weak circle of ...

I like this, I enjoy the narrative itself, and like the meaning in it. I don't agree that poetry is better when not in free verse, I think it depends ...

Okay, this is sweet. It obviously has feeling in it, and I realise it is your first poem. Your problem comes thusly: You're telling more than showing. Showing can come ...

"Can you swim?” Igor yelled over the sound of the crashing waves against the side of the plane as Thomas and Charlie quickly clasped to the edges of the window ...

Silence rips the air as a sudden movement is caught by the eye of each person. A cough catches in someone’s chest causing a dull thudding sound. Whose turn is ...

To start with the minor issues: in the second sentence of the last paragraph “first” should be “fist”. In the third sentence of the first paragraph, I don’t think the ...