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Hey Hayden, This is an interesting poem, mostly because I don't know who the narrator is even at the ending. You might be alluding to it somewhere and I'm just ...

CaT!, This will be short because you've written a beautiful little poem here! I agree with Sabre that your second stanza needs a couple more lines if only because it ...

Niagini, You open and close this poem with the most important lines. The lines that sink into my marrow and lie there, little slugs of meaning imbued on my understanding. ...

Hi there, Kimashleigh! I like what you're doing with the imagery in this piece, you can really feel the situation and the scenery, which is really important in the shorter ...

Hi Amii! It's awesome that you get to do some free verse poetry for school. I don't remember doing any (way back in the day) but I'm sure I would ...

Karzkid, You're pushing me here, I don't think I read this before I promised you I'd comment on it. And now I'm kind of regretting that because I'm going to ...

Hi Licious! I’m here as requested! I’ve read both spoilers and think that you’re on track for a fairly subtle (although not too subtle) look at cancer in the poem. ...

Hey Curves! Here as I’m pretty sure you demanded! This is maybe going to be a bit long, I’m still not sure what I’m going to say exactly. Your poem ...

Hi aseel! Reading the first versus the second version of your poem, the second is far more interesting! I had to look up the French, but it is gorgeous! I ...

Hello Mello! You have the nice base of a poem here, working well with imagery and a good sense of tone. I do think that it needs a bit of ...

Hey Los. I like this poem for the concept you've got going, it's working on a theoretical level but less on a practical one. The repetitious nature of "I said" ...

Hey Licious! I feel like I told you I'd look at this! And as it's reviewing challenge time it's clearly as good a time as any. Now, I've read over ...

This is old, so I’m cutting you some slack. What you need to work on I think is probably pretty clear to you. It’s cliché with well used phrases and ...

Jaggles, This is utterly beautiful, really. I think that you envisage and visit this bird-like girl very well, she's perfect on the whole. I enjoy her coming through the window, ...

Heys, I like what you’re doing with the rhyme here, you might want to tidy that up so that it’s a more solid rhyme, consistent. When you have inconsistent rhymes ...