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Great job! This going to go somewhere great! Maybe you could have her put under investigation for murder, that would be exciting. Would she run and hide, or try and ...

This reminded me of Robert Frost. It was the pattern behind it I think... I'm not really sure why. I liked this poem! It was nice and simple, but really ...

I liked the way the poem was written, I just disagree with the point, but, no matter! Why was the last line in the second stanza in parentheses? Just curious!

Very good! All I caught was in one of the stanzas, you might want to change the second fate to something like destiny. It sounded a bit repetitive. It was ...

Good job! This was pretty sweet! All I can say is, "What's up?" He said, walking him to me. Sounded like he was walking with someone to her.

This was awesome! I really liked it!

Wow! Your English is better than some American's English! There are no major grammar errors, and you made your point excellently! This is very inspiring!

Awesome job! All I can say is... Maybe add a line to the last stanza? I don't know, you may have done it to portray finality, but still, awesome poem!

Excellent as always! You spelled cauldron wrong, but that's no big deal. And, Caesar loyal to Blackbeard. is a fragment. That's no big deal though. Good job! :)

Excellent! You spelled shining wrong, and I don't know much about poetry, but the Wate' part kind of confused me, I read it was wait. That might just be because ...

All the grammar I can notice is taken, so I guess all I can say is nice job, and I feel for you!

I don't know much about poetry, but I like this! Good job! Although, a flame, can also be aflame. That's all I have, and a flame is really correct too. ...

I wish mine was in a cave like place by a beach house, but it's in literature.

Wow! I loved this, you painted a great image. Maybe you should just add a bit more color to the description? It was great, but if you were to write ...

Very awesome! All I can say is that it should be no one, not noone! Could Job!