Panikos

That's fair enough if it's intentional. In regards to the chapter being short, it's more about the fact that very little happens in it rather than the length, and by ...

Good to know I don't know all the answers yet. But why would he predict that they would've gone to Blackwood? It seemed UNexpected to me, given that he was ...

I did hand it in a while back with a few changes, but thank you!

You're not at all bothering me. The edits have improved it. I just spotted a potential typo at the very end though. Should it not be 'he knew better than ...

Thanks for the review! A bookmaker doesn't actually make books - they take bets on things. They're known more colloquially as bookies. A little confusing, I know. Also, the servant ...

You don't need to apologise to me, it's fine! I'm still really looking forward to reading more.

Haha, understandable. :D

Thanks for the review! I did mean to leave a lot unexplained. I'm not sure whether I'll get round to continuing it, but it's definitely supposed to be the opening ...

The Mana passage would work fine if you could just cut it down a bit. If you could compress the internal dialogue sections and make the bit where he gets ...

Don't apologise for mistakes! It's how we learn. :D

It being intentional is okay, but you have to be careful because it still feels quite monotonous to read. And I still think describing the physical sensation of it at ...

Even so, would they not still want to sell men for labour as well? It just seems a bit much to kill ALL of them.

I do get that he distrusts her, but I still think there would be subtler ways to show it. And it seemed like he would care more about the Emperor's ...

I've just googled some autobiographies. Here's some links if you're interested: The last one is for pair skating so it might not be as useful, but the others are for ...

It's fine, don't worry about it haha! Eagerly anticipating the drama and character development. :)