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The poem flows very fluently and I like it so much! "I don’t know how I strayed from her, I never, ever meant to leave, I want to be her, ...

I like these lyrics! There is a complete story so that's great. :] "I forget all the months that past in the summer" The word "past" is "passed" I'm not ...

You used great adjetives and "As I step into the new found world,Finally bereft of winter's frozen grip,I breathe" is my favorite line! I even like the whole idea to ...

It was good! Although, the "all" doesn't fit for the first word in the poem...or lyrics! You asked for lyric help? I think that's amazing that you're going into lyrics. ...

I think it is very simple but it Does help give the meaning out. I like it :). My favorite line is "It has become harder for me to stay" ...

"she knew that she was beautiful" This line doesn't sound right with "that." I think you did very good with the poem here. There are too many "one's" or "one" ...

"Every night is the last night, I dream of you But may the dream of you, be the last night, I find you." That is my favorite line! Oh, that ...

I liked both, yes. The first poem: It is just when I started reading it, I could tell each line didn't quite connect. It sounds rough at the edges. Overall ...

Wow, that's very good and so true. My favorite lines are "A million possibilities but far too little lead.I want to jot them down right here but emotions can’t be ...

The rhythm plays very well in this poem. I really love this, it's very suspenseful and builds excellent imagery throughout the lines. When I finished reading this I was like, ...

I pressed the "liked" button 'cause this is really good. I can see love in here...and I see the whole idea you created. About how love paints the way for ...

The last two lines don't sound right, it's just the word "normal" I think before"men" it should be something like, "This is not 'just' men killing one another," or a ...

When I finished reading this I was like, "Oh my Gosh!" This is very sad but it is very good. It relates to that's why it's amazingggg! I'm sorry that ...

Wow, I never heard that verse before, I officially just made it my favorite one! I really like your short story. The only thing that didn't sound right was the ...

I really liked your poem but there was just a few things: A living specially made sculpture, The words sound out of order a bit. Maybe try " A life ...