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Well, I like it. Which is something, I'm not into poetry :p Just do some proof reading, no? I find the easier it is to read, the more critiques you ...

Gathers stood behind stalls do you mean gatherers? or is this a special name? I said politely even though I was kind of ticked that she nearly made me fall ...

Another epic chapter. :p I liked the end section, but then I like people jumping out with knives lol. Cliff hangers are gooooood.... Cassandra is scary. and a bit psycho... ...

In the name of the father, the son and of the holy spirit. Amen.” ahaha. You missed a ". I've shouldn't had took over for Melissa.” I think you mean ...

and pimples that had erupted throughout his face Doesn't sound quite right.... and pimples that had erupted across his face maybe? confused as to what he desired. 'Desired' doesn't fit ...

Well here goes.... Pikara rose, inches away from banging her head on the wooden wall. Huh? how do you hit your head on a wall if you are rising? The ...

Yay! You got a trashy kids program and gave it meaning... And did it rather well, too. I didn't see any mistakes, but that is one perceptive kid. I haven't ...

Hah! I loved the magic over kira's head. Brilliant. It was good, I saw no mistakes grammer and spelling wise. Possibly the only thing that could be improved would be ...

I noticed your sub-heading. So I'll get in trouble if it ends up it's in the wrong section? lmao. Nice. :lol: You already know what I think of this. *pokes* ...

Heh. Very.... erm.... pornographic. But anyway, it was well written. Watch your punctuation, I saw a couple missed full stops and the like. Your writing has improved... phenomenally. Everything flows ...

Oh! I read the lost colony a couple of weeks ago! *grins* I know they are supposed to be too young for me... but.... it's the teenage evil (or not ...

Must be, cause I understood it all... except take what? making him insane? huh? “Hello cousin,” Jacob said in his semi-English accent, “did I give you enough time to plot ...

Six year olds with death-threats... brilliant. I see what the other two are saying, and she seems an intelligent girl but still a whiney brat. Use whiney brat language. And ...

Woah... what kind of slushy is that? I know normal ones sure don't make my breasts tingle.... But anyway... Nothing much really happened in this, but it was still interesting. ...

*starts chanting* Drop! Drop! Dro- Oh, wait, sorry. Heh. I hope he dies a horrible, painful death. Anyway, this is a great chapter! When they finally realise it... then that ...