NovaRose

Right...

Um, it won't let me...

Now THIS is poetry! I love it. You got the whole structure thing that I think every good poem deserves, rather than just some chopped-up rant or freewrite. Bravo!

Sounds wacky and zany.

Yeah, we really need a [center][/center] tag. They have it in proboards, and I think you can add it... I'll bring it up to Nate.

Honestly, I thought the monster part fit in perfectly with the whole thing, and evolution v. creationism hardly matters in a metaphorical poem. That being said, I liked this poem ...

Is that the end, or is there more? It could easily go either way, but you have me so enthralled that I want to read more of the story. I ...

Here's an idea: separate your paragraphs. Indentation doesn't work here, so you have to go in and add an extra line between each paragraph. No one will read it otherwise.

Whoa, that was weird. Thanks for pointing that out. I think I was combining words or something.

Um... what?

LOL, I think that's gonne be enogh crits for a while, eh?

Interesting.

*covers ears* You don't need to shout. Unless this is supposed to be, like, hard rock or something. I didn't really get the point of this, but it sounded cool.

Some Mormons, especially in Utah, tend to think that they're better than other people and that they can't interact with non-Mormons. That's the only legitimate thing I can think of ...

Interesting. I'd like to see where this goes.