NovaRose

When you talk about getting close to the one victim, you repeat "once" twice.

I like your writing. Hunter pretty much said exactly what I was thinking.

I remember when I had a comic in the school newspaper... it was horrible. Well, Sticks is great, and there's always KeenSpot if no one will syndicate ya!

I just have to say that this is one of the coolest ideas ever! I would never have thought to use HTML in a poem. Great job.

An interesting take on gods. It reminds me of Douglas Adams' The Long, Dark Teatime of the Soul . There are a couple of spelling errors at the beginning, and ...

Dusky, you mean that book with the people who had their emotions removed? That was a great story... I wish YWG hadn't become so chaotic...

Well, TBR, he is four years your senior. And he's a senior. Man, we're OLD!

Come on Dono! I can't imagine how many times I've read this story (in its many revisions) since you started it IN EIGTH GRADE!!! In other words, kindly post more.

Before I read this, could you please break up the text? Just add extra spaces between paragraphs please. It's really hard to read a long block of text...

I'm actually planning on rewriting a good portion of the first part, but I'm going to try swooping instead of bashing. Anyways, looks like it's about time for an update, ...

Well, you are Hunter, but I know what you mean ;). I just assumed he'd be the same since that's basically what I did with Bob. And I will edit ...

I'll keep those things in mind, Hunter. Do you mean that Bob shouldn't say that Hunter's not a vampire and instead be surprised that vampires are even in existence or ...

“Well, it is not a topic to joke about,” he scolded. I rolled my eyes in response. Robert and his family were al very devout followers of the Church of ...

Yeah yeah yeah I'll get around to it sometime. Well, for now: Chapter 2 The three kwu-ghai stopped in front of me, hardly a foot away, their halberds inches from ...

Meh, darn run-ons... that's a big fault of mine. I'm going to try "swooping" this time (write the whole thing before revising), so I'll catch those run-ons the next time ...