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Noelle

if we didn't have words to read, write, and speak, I think I would die

  • Short Story » General, General Re: Field of Flowers

    Hi there! This is really good. I don't know if it's supposed to be like this, but I see this whole story as a metaphor. It seems that the girl ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Torture Scene

    Hi there! This is a really good piece. You did a good job describing this, I could feel the pain of the main character. You also did a good job ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Mourning Songs.

    Hi there! This started out a little slow, just a description of your character's thoughts, but then you got into some adventure and a tad bit of mystery. When you ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: We Are

    Hi there! This is a great poem. I was reading through this and I was going to quote my favorite part, but I couldn't find one specific part to quote! ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Chapter 1: Rush

    Hi there! Wow...this is great! I was reading through this, my eyes glued to the screen; I didn't want to stop reading! These are the kind of stories I like, ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Living

    Hi there! My corrections/comments are in purple below: I stand bravely at the top if the hill, looking down, Pushing Then I push forward with the silver poles. Gaining speed ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Hard Life

    Hi there! The ending of this made me laugh. :) This is a good piece, it has a lot of good dialouge. You didn't use much description which means your ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Just for Summer...

    Hi there! This is a really good poem, I enjoyed reading it! I like the way you told us a story and you were still able to keep it poetic. ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Bookworm's efforts

    Hi there! You know, I always find that we write the best when we're on an emotional high (or low). That being said, this is a really good poem. Like ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Watched(final draft)

    Hi there! This is a really good start. I know it's not finished so I'm going to try and keep my review free of the questions I have. So, you ...

    Sep 4, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Hell

    Hi there! This is interesting. Is it supposed to be an article or just a description of Hell? I'm just curious. Anyway, you did a good job with this. There's ...

    Sep 4, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: How Do You Want To Go?

    Hi there! This is a good story and quite a good read. I like how you put 'rasp, rasp' in there many times before switching your main character's thoughts. You ...

    Sep 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: It's been a while since;

    Hi there! This is a really great poem, I love it! You put a lot of emotion into this and that really made it stand out. I like the way ...

    Sep 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The One

    Hi there! I really enjoyed reading this poem! When I first saw the title, I thought it was going to be another love poem, but it definitely wasn't, it was ...

    Sep 3, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Letting Go

    Hi there! Wow...this is great! It's a really powerful piece and you kept me reading to the very end. Your character's are so real, the reader can definitely relate to ...

    Sep 3, 2011


The most important thing is to preserve the world we live in. Unless people understand and learn about our world, habitats, and animals, they won't understand that if we don't protect those habitats, we'll eventually destroy ourselves.
— Jack Hanna