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Re: Field of Flowers
Hi there! This is really good. I don't know if it's supposed to be like this, but I see this whole story as a metaphor. It seems that the girl ...
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Re: Torture Scene
Hi there! This is a really good piece. You did a good job describing this, I could feel the pain of the main character. You also did a good job ...
Sep 5, 2011 -
Re: Mourning Songs.
Hi there! This started out a little slow, just a description of your character's thoughts, but then you got into some adventure and a tad bit of mystery. When you ...
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Re: We Are
Hi there! This is a great poem. I was reading through this and I was going to quote my favorite part, but I couldn't find one specific part to quote! ...
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Re: Chapter 1: Rush
Hi there! Wow...this is great! I was reading through this, my eyes glued to the screen; I didn't want to stop reading! These are the kind of stories I like, ...
Sep 5, 2011 -
Re: Living
Hi there! My corrections/comments are in purple below: I stand bravely at the top if the hill, looking down, Pushing Then I push forward with the silver poles. Gaining speed ...
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Re: Hard Life
Hi there! The ending of this made me laugh. :) This is a good piece, it has a lot of good dialouge. You didn't use much description which means your ...
Sep 5, 2011 -
Re: Just for Summer...
Hi there! This is a really good poem, I enjoyed reading it! I like the way you told us a story and you were still able to keep it poetic. ...
Sep 5, 2011 -
Re: Bookworm's efforts
Hi there! You know, I always find that we write the best when we're on an emotional high (or low). That being said, this is a really good poem. Like ...
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Re: Watched(final draft)
Hi there! This is a really good start. I know it's not finished so I'm going to try and keep my review free of the questions I have. So, you ...
Sep 4, 2011 -
Re: Hell
Hi there! This is interesting. Is it supposed to be an article or just a description of Hell? I'm just curious. Anyway, you did a good job with this. There's ...
Sep 4, 2011 -
Re: How Do You Want To Go?
Hi there! This is a good story and quite a good read. I like how you put 'rasp, rasp' in there many times before switching your main character's thoughts. You ...
Sep 4, 2011 -
Re: It's been a while since;
Hi there! This is a really great poem, I love it! You put a lot of emotion into this and that really made it stand out. I like the way ...
Sep 4, 2011 -
Re: The One
Hi there! I really enjoyed reading this poem! When I first saw the title, I thought it was going to be another love poem, but it definitely wasn't, it was ...
Sep 3, 2011 -
Re: Letting Go
Hi there! Wow...this is great! It's a really powerful piece and you kept me reading to the very end. Your character's are so real, the reader can definitely relate to ...
Sep 3, 2011
