NinjaRebel

Posted: Tue Nov 04, 2008 4:58 am Post subject: Fallen -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Little girl, you've wandered so far... Lost the light of your gui

wow, and I mean wow! I can totaly see why people say that this is one of your best. There are almost no mistakes, awesome work! All of us are ...

The dreamy eyes, that hold much meaning in their depths. Capture me with one gaze. The timeless smile that shines across your face. Is too powerful, irresistible. That voice of ...

She walks in like the dead air. Musty and still, nothing there. She smiles, the light bursts… Yet dies in an instant She asks about the tree, cut down last ...

She stands here and waits on the sidewalk of Forth, Wanting so badly her home and its warmth. He's coming, he's coming, she thinks to herself, And yet she is ...

Wow. That was amazing. It had a very good feel to it, I couldn't see any mistakes really, but I'm not the best at spotting them. Keep up the good ...

This is quite a good poem. Very different writing stile to me so I don’t know if this crit is alright. The Bad Things The Bad Things come at night, ...

There was talk of connection, There were bowed heads and sighs. There was talk of deception, Yet I could see through the lies. There was talk of abduction, There were ...

Your you. I’m me. Too very different people It’s hard to believe... But we are in love. No one understands. But one day I know... He'll take my hand. We ...

I think that this is a wonderfull poem. There arn't many mistakes but I'll point out the ones that I see. Sleep Comes when I shut my eyes ( Mabey ...

I really liked this poem, it had a good flow and rhythm to it. I'm going to review each verse seperately... I don't know if I told this tale, Another ...