Nefer

Bah, I haven't got much time left on the computer but I've read the first paragraph and loved this part: They bore into my mind, into my imagination, like maggots. ...

This was very short and to be honest it didn't really interest me at all. I have no idea what is going on, is the guy mouring for someone or ...

"Drink my blood and live forever." -- Lestat. I hate Louis and Brad Pitt but I liked Tom Cruise as Lestat. I preferred the "Interview with a Vampire" movie to ...

This should be under Science Fiction if it has anything to do with 'aliens'. Not 'life like', it's meant to be one word: lifelike. walked towards house number 39 There's ...

I soon as I read this I was reminded of A Christmas Carol , I loved the book and if this is anything like it then I'm sure I'll like ...

Hmm a poem about streaks. This wasn't that bad to be honest, I mostly liked it from the second stanza, the first one wasn't as good as the others. Also ...

a narrow gold chain I don't think 'narrow' is the right word to describe the thinness of a chain, it would be better to say instead: a thin gold chain ...

I don't know what to say... I like it, it reminds me of how I use to write, the words would just come to me and I would write them ...

she didn't know weather Wrong it's 'whether'. This is getting better and I can just imagine what it's like on the ship and the bully women. Good job, there aren't ...

Chapter One 'Society running to dirt, but it's their own fault' This should come after 'about' and not in a new sentence, otherwise if you read the other sentence it ...

A tear slips down my face. Shouldn't it be: A tear slides down my face. I slip it off my finger, clutching on it for a moment. It should be: ...

Interesting. :D What weird ideas you have. :D I only found two mistakes though: Or it could be about a strange girl living in the jungle, which has taken a ...

Lalian sits back and rubs his chin in a thoughtful sort of way. Isn't this meant to be in the past tense? I suggest: Lalian sat back in his chair ...

Honestly I tried reading the Lord of the Rings. I managed to finish the first book in about a month, I am not bothered to read the other two since ...

I've read some of his books, I really love the 'Discworld' series. I did find some of his books confusing but I'd rather read Terry Pratchett books than J.K. Rowlings ...