Nate

Hey NonFictionIdot and welcome to YWS. I noticed you have three works already up, but only two reviews. Please review more! We like everyone to review three items for every ...

Could I post music to a song if it doesn't have lyrics yet? Or do I have to come up with the lyrics first? Sounds good to me. I'd love ...

I'm not good at reviewing poetry, so perhaps there is something I'm missing here (plus I'm not much into Vampires). However, I'm afraid I don't understand the references throughout the ...

Too much use of the possession. For the first third of the story, everything is either "his this" or "his that." Once you've established the guy's surroundings, there's no need ...

I read this a few days ago or so, but it's not getting enough attention. Here's what I like about this story: it's engaging. It reads like an old friend ...

Woah! I was reading the story thinking that this was just another story about rabbits, when all of a sudden the bunny killed the grasshopper. Definitely made me see the ...

hahahaha I greatly enjoyed this Castles. It reminds me a lot of a story I wrote many years ago on the same subject. I don't have any real criticisms as ...

Kyte/Stori, you don't know how refreshing it is to read this poem. Unless the poet is really good, I like poems that don't pretend to be about anything more than ...

Hey coolcat and welcome to YWS! I noticed you have no reviews to your name, so I highly suggest reviewing some other works. The more you review, the more you'll ...

Haha, I like the ending. You hint at it with the title, and in the second and third stanzas, but I didn't fully get it until the end. That fourth ...

lol, you're right; it is cheesy. But that doesn't mean it's bad. I, for one, liked it. This is a poem that requires two readings; the first time around, I ...

First off, your grammar is good. I also like your style of writing; it flows pretty well. A few things: "She’ll begin with the yelling, the horrible screaming that makes ...

Your rhyme scheme is very odd. You go AABBCC then DEFFGHG, which is a bit like driving in a straight line then all of a sudden zig-zagging for no apparent ...

Putting a comma at the end of every line isn't all that necessary. Some do, some don't, and I don't think it much matters. Commas are used to show a ...

It's always good to be able to read three poems at once from an author because it gives you a good feel for the author's style, and you've got a ...