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Re: Grace, As Shown By My Dad
Hello. I can feel your empathy towards this boy, I can feel the pain from your words. This is short, indeed, but very, very powerful. I could only think of ...
Jun 3, 2015 -
Re: Father Mine
Hello! I can see that you love English literature, am I right? At least I do, and this poem reminds me of it a lot. (So that's a compliment.) There ...
Jun 3, 2015 -
Re: Art from the Heart
Hello! Welcome to young writers society! First of all, I love the story. It's amazing how young children can open your eyes sometimes. Here's what I think you should think ...
May 20, 2015 -
Re: Dirty Little Secret
Ah! I was already wondering whose parents you were talking about. I like the style of your writing, but I think the verbs in the first and second part should ...
May 19, 2015 -
Re: Almost (Ch. 1)
Wow! Wow! I love your writing. It's a really thrilling story, I love how you wrote out the memory of Jackson. I'm really curious to the rest of the story! ...
May 16, 2015 -
Re: Goodbye, friend.
Hello! First of all, I think it would be better if you were consistent in the time of your verbs. You usually use the past simple, so I think you ...
May 16, 2015 -
Re: Where do Socks Hide
I do like your poem, I love how you can be dramatic about socks. However you should start every line with a capital letter (it's a rule), and I think ...
May 12, 2015 -
Re: Melissa's Hobby
Wow. I love your writing. Seriously, it seems like you already wrote ten bestsellers. Your style is such high level, I wish I could forget what I read and read ...
May 12, 2015 -
Re: Sixteen
Hi! First of all, I love the general thought. Wishing you'd change completely, be the person you want to be just by turning 16. I do think you should say ...
May 12, 2015 -
Re: -=The Sorting Hat=-
I like your idea, but I think some of the answers are wrong. In question 4, why is casting a painful spell on the coins something a Hufflepuff would do? ...
May 11, 2015 -
Re: The Girl That Was My Living Heaven
Hello DevonthePoet! I like the fact that you wrote this based on a true story, your own memory. I see someone else already gave you some grammar advice, I noticed ...
May 11, 2015
