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Art from the Heart

by CzMunoz001


                                                                Art from the Heart

     I wanted a job to show my parents I work hard and be independent. And to my surprise last year, the opportunity presented itself. During that summer, all I could think about was making money and making my parents proud. While that was my main focus, I felt that there was something more than gaining materialistic things. Little did I know, this experience would change the way I viewed life.

     I began my first job as a drawing instructor at a church. All I had in mind was how much I would be making. And I must admit, my attitude was pretty selfish. I couldn’t help but feel scared, excited to work, and what was in store for me there.

     As I entered the room, I noticed there were kids of different ages ranging from 6 to 11 yrs. old. Their faces were eager and looking forward to learning about art. I couldn’t help but see the artistry that each one had, and how each paint brush stroke flew onto each canvas with ease. All of a sudden, a little shy girl walked into the room.

     “Sorry I’m late.” She said.

     “That’s ok,” I said. “Just pull a chair and sit wherever you would like.”

     As I began walking around the room, I viewed each or their artwork and I could see how much they adored it. After class was over, I walked up to the little girl.

     “Hello, my name is Czarina what is your name?”

     “My name is Mary.” She said shyly.

     “Well it’s nice to meet you Mary, and welcome to this class. Hope to see you next week.”

     And eventually, she came week after week to learn more. As weeks began progressing, I would grow and get to know Mary.

     One day during class, I asked the students what were their favorite hobbies, favorite kinds of art, and what they wanted to be when they grew up. And despite what many would think, Mary was the only one who wanted to become an artist. So of course, it really took me by surprise. After class, I asked her what interested her in art and how she fell in love with it. She then began to describe her story.

     “I grew up in a broken home where domestic violence was common, and there was no money for art supplies.” She said with tears in her eyes. “I would sell my toys just to be able to buy pencils and paper for school, but my parents would tear up my artwork and tell me I could never make a living with art. I would draw a lot in school, and it was the only place where I could feel comfortable to escape the situation I was in. But thanks to this church, I was able to better my artwork. Thank you for having a big heart to teach us each week.” And with those words, tears began to well up in my eyes. Listening to her talk, I in the same way knew what it was like to not having art supplies.

     Knowing that I started off with an ungrateful and selfish outlook, I couldn’t believe what she was saying. She was actually thanking me, when in reality; I should have been thanking the students for this job. After taking some time to think over what she said, I had come to a realization and an idea to help more people.

     After summer was over, I began an art program in the winter. This art program was for kids who didn’t have money for classes, and who wanted to be an artist but had no money for art supplies. And with the money I made that summer, I used it for the students to have art supplies.

     Through this experience, I’ve learned something. Life isn’t about the materialistic things or the money, because you can have all the money in the world but never be fully satisfied. And sometimes with the little you do have, you learn to appreciate it a lot more. The moment I finally gained true joy, was when I started thinking about others rather than myself.


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Sun May 31, 2015 7:15 pm
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Hey, CzMunoz001! Nice to meet you, I'm wisegirl22, and I'm here to review your work!

In most books and pieces, authors write out their numbers and words. "6" should be "six", "11" should be "eleven", and "yrs." should be "years."

" I noticed there were kids of different ages ranging from 6 to 11 yrs. old."

That was the only nitpick I had. Otherwise, this was great! It touched my heart in a way and it definitely taught me something. Not many works or authors can do that, you're one of the few I've seen here try. I really enjoyed this and can relate to being selfish (believe me). I feel so sorry for the little girl even if she's not a real person. Cheers to you and congratulations for making your impression on me!

-wisegirl22




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Fri May 22, 2015 7:52 pm
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wow, this was a very nice story with a wonderful moral. it has a very nice narrative style and flows nicely. i love how personal the story feels. it's a very touching and meaningful story. the emotion is very well done and simplistic. i would check on your punctuation thought. other than that, it was perfect. very gorgeous story. well done.




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Wed May 20, 2015 12:10 pm
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Hello! Welcome to young writers society!
First of all, I love the story. It's amazing how young children can open your eyes sometimes.
Here's what I think you should think about:
"I wanted a job to show my parents I work hard and be independent."
I think you should change this to "I wanted a job that would show my parents I am able/willing to work hard and I'm independent." or "I wanted a job to show my parents I work hard to be independent." It sounds better that way.
"All I had in mind was how much I would be making." I think you should add the word "money" in this sentence to make it a little more clear.

The next thing I saw was in the sentence "Hello, my name is Czarina what is your name?". I think you should add a comma after "Czarina". And maybe you could change "your name" into "yours".

Then, the story Mary told Czarina really took me by surprise. You mentioned the children being between 6 and 11 years of age. I don't think that 11-year-olds are able to use these words in this way. Kids are usually not really willing to talk about their problems, if they have any. Mary should be in the middle of growing up, so it's a bit strange that she talked to Czarina as if she were an adult already. I think you could change her story into a bit more childish language, so to speak. Look at her life through her eyes, see her limited vocabulary.

The last thing I noticed was this sentence: "And with the money I made that summer, I used it for the students to have art supplies." You could change this to "And with the money I made that summer, I provided the students with art supplies." or "And the money I made that summer was used to give the students art supplies."

Again, I really like your story. Don't stop writing, I'm curious to what else you have to write. (:





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