Nargles

Thanks heaps. This is very very helpful. I will take what you said and try it :)

No don't take it down. It's not bad, far from it in fact. You just need to work on it. Trust me there are much much worse poems out there. ...

Hey, It's me. This is really good. I don't really know if you need to change it at all. It has a very poetic feel and I like the flow ...

Thanks heaps for your review. I sort of get where you're going at with the repetition but I'm sort of hesitant to change it. For me it shows the fact ...

thank you so much. That actually means a lot that you liked it and could relate to it!

hey thanks, don't worry about being harsh. Everyone needs criticism. I will take on board what you said.

Thanks, I get what you mean by the second half, and there is certainly a distinct change of tone between the two :)

Thank you, yeah the last line cause great internal debate, I like it but then I find it kind of out of tone with the rest of the poem. I ...

the three dots ... that's an ellipse. To show the passing of time or when quoting things.

This is a very good poem and shows how time passes and how we, as humans, change because of that. It's a nice way of saying that all you have ...

Hey, thanks heaps for the comment. It is more about assault and how the guy still thought that she would still with him. It is about how at times people ...

Thanks, that clears things up heaps. I know what you mean about characters being black and white and I am against that completely, in this it just felt weird. I ...

thanks! :)

The review was great thanks! I get about endless being repeated and I agree when I reread it it did sound out of place! :)

Hey, thanks heaps for the review, glad you liked it!!