Nameless_And_Shamed

So Zoey is his unborn child's name?

It was kind of random. Too choppy for me.

Yes! You must update. My goodness!

Amazing story! Keep it up!

Oh my, okay. I hope you're going to continue this, and maybe give some background info because I'm sorta confused about some things. Anyway, keep up the good work!

I love your (sort of) random title, but of course I use them myself, so.... Good job by the way.

It didn't scare me. I really liked this story, it's quite unique. I think every girl can relate to this because that's what they did their dolls, haha. Good job. ...

You really need to finish this thing girl. It is amazing and I really want to read more.

It was just a quick think that I thought was a bit funny, that's all. I was bored!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hm, okay. I'm only going to say one thing. Please, please work on your mechanics/grammar. It kills me when people don't have good mechanics/grammar in poems. That is all.

Oh, thanks. I think I fixed it right.

I like your imagery, a lot. I find your poem very, unique. Also I like how you ended it, I would have found it hard to, by all means. You ...

You didn't tell me you had another story goin'. I read the comment from the other person, and she got all of the things I saw. Good job though. Keep ...

I found you! Haha! I love how you write. It makes me jealous! :x Haha. Can't wait to read more! Lily.